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The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by 4 types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by 4 types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
#people #noise #pollution #night #cities #areas
The bar chart provides data about the
number
 of individuals who were affected by four types of noise
pollution
in
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day
 and
night
 in
cities
 and rural areas in 2007.
Overall
, in
both
day
 and
night
 in
cities
 and rural areas in 2007 the highest
number
 of humans were affected by
traffic
pollution
. As can clearly be seen,
in
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both
day
 and
night
 in
cities
 the highest
number
 of
people
 were affected by
traffic
pollution
. During the
day
 the
number
 of human beings affected by
traffic
pollution
 was more or less 60
million
,
whereas
in
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the
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night
 the figure of
people
 affected by
traffic
pollution
 in
cities
 was less than 50
million
people
. The lowest
number
 of individuals in
both
day
 and
night
 in
cities
 were affected by industry. Turning to rural areas in 2007
in
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both
day
 and
night
 the highest
number
 of
people
 were affected by
traffic
pollution
. During
a
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day
 the figure of
people
were
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was
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 roughly 33
million
,
while
in
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the
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night
 the
number
 of
people
 who were affected by
traffic
pollution
 was approximately 23
million
. In 2007 in
both
day
 and
night
 no one suffered by industry.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, pollution, day, night, cities, both, traffic, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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