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The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by 4 types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by 4 types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
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The bar chart provides data about the
number
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 of individuals who were affected by four types of noise
pollution
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in
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day
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 and
night
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 in
cities
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 and rural areas in 2007.
Overall
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, in
both
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day
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 and
night
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 in
cities
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 and rural areas in 2007 the highest
number
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 of humans were affected by
traffic
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pollution
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. As can clearly be seen,
in
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both
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day
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 and
night
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 in
cities
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 the highest
number
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 of
people
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 were affected by
traffic
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pollution
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. During the
day
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 the
number
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 of human beings affected by
traffic
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pollution
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 was more or less 60
million
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,
whereas
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in
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at
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the
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night
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 the figure of
people
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 affected by
traffic
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pollution
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 in
cities
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 was less than 50
million
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people
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. The lowest
number
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 of individuals in
both
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day
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 and
night
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 in
cities
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 were affected by industry. Turning to rural areas in 2007
in
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both
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day
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 and
night
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 the highest
number
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 of
people
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 were affected by
traffic
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pollution
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. During
a
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the
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day
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 the figure of
people
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were
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was
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 roughly 33
million
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,
while
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in
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at
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the
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apply
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night
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 who were affected by
traffic
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pollution
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 was approximately 23
million
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. In 2007 in
both
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day
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 and
night
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 no one suffered by industry.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, pollution, day, night, cities, both, traffic, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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