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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

In order to study at university students are required to par expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford then so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
education
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 is getting expensive and not every individual can afford
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by
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 their own.
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 a debate has been sparked that university
education
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 should be free to all;
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, I partially agree with the statement and will provide its justification in upcoming paragraphs.
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 with, higher
education
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 is essential for
everyone
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 to get a good job.
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, there are numerous talented students who belong to poor families and cannot pay their tuition fees
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 their own. So, to promote these talented
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, the government should pay their tuition fees so that they can study and achieve huge success.
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, in the recent batch of I.A.S. selection in the Indian government jobs, top positions were secured by three
people
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 who got their
education
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 only through the help of the N.G.O.
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, to attain top positions filled with the most talented
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, the government should provide higher
education
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 to
everyone
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.
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,
this
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 trend can
also
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 be misused by a few
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 as free
education
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 might not give them the responsibility to work part-time.
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, they will be irresponsible and will get into bad habits.
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, earlier students were working
while
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 their studies to get money for
the
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 expenses and to pay their tuition fees but with
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this
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this,
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 they will not work and
instead
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 waste their whole time.
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, they will not gain experience and responsibilities to achieve the goals
in
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with
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 limited resources.
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, free
education
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 should be in terms of
scholaship
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scholarship
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 or partial waiver.
To conclude
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, I would like to assert that, though higher
education
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 is important for every student and should be available to
everyone
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 making it completely free for
everyone
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 will make them irresponsible. So there should be some terms enforced.

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Ensure that the introduction clearly addresses the prompt and includes a precise thesis statement outlining what the essay will cover.
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Support your main points with more detailed explanations and relevant examples to fully develop your argument.
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Maintain a logical flow between sentences and paragraphs using a variety of linking phrases.
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Use a conclusion that clearly summarizes the essay's main points and restates your position, creating a strong finish to the essay.
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