Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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in
modern
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world is
about
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medicine
research
projects
.
While
today
this
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projects
are mostly funded by private
companies
, I believe that they should
also
be developed by
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institutions.
This
essay will discuss whether private
companies
and
government
needs
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to work on
research
projects
. On
one
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hand, private
companies
are usually more
profeccional
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professional
as they are provided with better
eguipment
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equipment
and facilities. These centers of medical
researches
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hire
high-qualified
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employees to work on the
inprovements
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improvements
in curing possible
disease
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.
For example
,
at the end
of 2019, Avicena
medical
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center
was
first
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organisation that started to work on
COVID-19
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vaccine and
succeded
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in
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the beginning of 2020. Their progressive laboratories and researchers were the pride of
this
center
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, and
furthermore
, became even more important for science after the development of the vaccine. On another hand, as private
centers
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can be too expensive for users, some governments invest
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progressive local hospitals to help with
its
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citizens
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needs.
For instance
, the
government
can get some new medical
drug
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from another
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center
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centre
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or hires a professional who can talk about the
propper
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way of
utilization
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the utilization
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of new
drug
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to the governmental
center
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employees.
As a result
, the residents now have access to treatment that previously seemed unreachable.
However
, the
government
's institutions'
capacityis
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capacity is
not as progressive as private
companies'
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companies
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to fund some really
expencive
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expensive
medical
projects
. In conclusion, the
government
could support medical
research
projects
with the help of funding and cure its users, they do not have the same luxury as private entities that can lose large sums of money. I believe that governmental
companies
should be fully
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from
budget
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and make the new
research
projects
more approachable to locals.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Support your main points with more detailed examples and explanations. This deepens the examination of the topic and strengthens the argument.
task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task. The question asks for your opinion on whether research should be handled by private companies, individuals or government. The response covered private companies and government but largely omitted the role of individuals.
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task achievement
Use relevant, specific examples to support your points. These examples should directly relate to the argument you are making, and they should be detailed enough to add value to your writing.

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