The graph below shows how people buy music.

The line graph gives detailed information about how many percentages of people bought music in different gadgets in the space of 8 years(2011-2018).

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it is clear that

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the shares of "CDs purchased" were dominant

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the "streams" had the lowest at the beginning of the period.

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, it is worth noting that "Downloads" witnessed a small fall despite some fluctuations over the period. In detail, music loaded to CDs was the most common among the public and it recorded the highest trend just under 55% in 2011. Following that, there was a slight decrease to around 20% until the end of the period.

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that, "streams" experienced a significant increase in spite of being the least, wheres, in 2011, it was at roughly 10%,afterwards, there was a rise to 20% in 2015 and reached 40% in 2018.

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, "Downloads" was in the middle 30% and 40% before increasing to nearly 43% in 2014.

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but not least, the figure for downloads went down noticeably to 30% in 2018.

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The graph below shows how people buy music.

In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

In companies, promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside a company and not to someone outside the company or new hiring. What is your opinion on this?

Some people argue that governments should spend more money on developing bullet and metro rail facilities, while others support the idea of spending money on upgrading current public transport system. discuss both views and give your opinion.

You are going to visit the town where your friend went to university. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • explain why you will be visiting the town • give details of where you will be staying • ask your friend to recommend some evening entertainment.

The US film industry has too much influence on the film industry around the world. Governments have a duty to invest money in their own film industries to protect and develop their cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?