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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The Pie Charts
compares
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compare
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 the trend in a
particualr
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particular
 country
how
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in how
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 working adults spend their
time
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 on extra activities in five decades. In 1958, Working adults
spend
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spent
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third
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a third
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 of their
time
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on
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apply
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working and 32
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percent
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per cent
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 of
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time
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their time
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on
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apply
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sleeping. Comparing
this
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 to 2008, people spend more
time
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on
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apply
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working(42%) rather than sleeping(25%). The
time
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 to travel to work
also
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 varies in different
time
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 frames - with 2
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percent
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per cent
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time
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spend
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spent
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 on travelling to 8
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percent
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per cent
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time
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spend
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spent
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 on travelling. The
time
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 spent
on
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apply
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hanging out with friends/family in 1958 is considerably higher than the
time
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 spent in 2008. 8
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percent
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per cent
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 of
working
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the working
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 population
tends
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tended
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 to relax at home in 1958 and comparing
this
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 to 2008 which is significantly more in number. The
time
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 spent
on
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apply
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staying at home in 2008 for working adults
is
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was
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 13
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percent
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per cent
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. There
is
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was
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 only
small
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a small
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 increase
on
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in
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amount
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the amount
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 of
time
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 spent
on
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apply
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playing sports
in
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between
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 1958 and 2008.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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