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Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can government do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

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Today,many cities around the world face an increasing amount of
garbage
 produced by citizens.In
this
 essay,I will attempt to investigate the causes of
this
 and
also
 find some solutions for
this
.
To begin
 with,there are many reasons why so much rubbish is produced.One important factor is the lifestyle of many people in today's world, which has led to them buying and consuming more products; food, clothes,and home appliances.
As a result
,more packaging is coming away every day which creates a lot of rubbish.
Furthermore
,many families do not separate reusable
garbage
 like cans or glass jars from the rest since they are too tired or busy.The main reason for
this
 is that the majority of some individuals have to work long hours out of home to make enough money. Admittedly,governments can do various things to decrease the amount of
garbage
.
Firstly
,they can legislate laws to limit
garbage
 produced by households.
As a consequence
,people would definitely try to buy only the things which they need to avoid throwing away so much.
This
 is likely to be effective
although
 it might not be so popular,especially in megapolises.
Also
,governments could invest in building recycling plants
that
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so that
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garbage
 is reused to produce new products.
For instance
, they could use plastic bottles to make new plastic balls or other
that
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apply
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kind
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kinds
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 of
productions
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products
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. In conclusion,the
reason
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reasons
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 behind the rise in waste production include consumerism and people not
to recycle
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recycling
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,
and
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apply
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 possible solutions are laws to restrict household
garbage
as well as
 building recycling centres or areas.
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