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Nowadays, distance-learning programs are such common thing for us (the study material by post, by internet) but some people argue that courses can never be taken as good as those by attending in a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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E-learning develops day by day, in which books are switched to e-books that can be read by
students
 anywhere and face-to-face
classes
 are switched to virtual
classes
. Even there are many schools operated only
via
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online for people who have another business that makes them unable to attend in-person
classes
.
However
, some think that face-to-face lectures are more effective than virtual ones. I partly agree that courses cannot be taught in person. Attending
class
 onsite allows
students
 to understand better the materials given by lecturers. On-campus
classes
 mean the
students
 will be having
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real interaction with lecturers and
also
 friends of the
class
 that they can discuss with.
As a result
,
students
 would feel more motivated to study more and ace the course.
This
 will lead to positive outcomes, especially in exams that are held onsite and supervised. With that, the
students
 will have no space for cheating, which is no problem for them because they already understand the materials totally, so they will get their academic scores by themselves.
Although
 in-person
classes
 are more effective, online
classes
 are more flexible. They are less time-consuming, and more cost-efficient, especially for
students
 who live afar. To exemplify, my campus and my house distance is around 25
kilometers
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 and I have to leave two hours before the
class
 starts
due to
 the long distance and the congestion.
In addition
, I have to spend more money on transportation compared to if I am taking a virtual
class
 at home.
Nevertheless
, both sides have pros and cons, it depends on how the
students
 take the lectures. Some of them are more comfortable taking
classes
 in an online way and some of them prefer to take on-campus
classes
 to understand better and have some social interactions.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay provides an overall clear structure; however, it is important to create clear paragraphs and ensure each one centers around a single main idea. Use a range of cohesive devices and topic sentences effectively to better signpost your arguments and improve the readability of your essay.
task achievement
Your response to the task is generally adequate but tends to lean towards stating both sides rather than directly addressing the extent of your agreement or disagreement. Aim to present a clear position throughout the response with well-developed points that directly correlate to the task's statement.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance-learning
  • E-learning
  • Online education
  • Asynchronous/Synchronous learning
  • Webinar
  • Virtual classroom
  • MOOC (Massive Open Online Course)
  • Accessibility
  • Flexibility
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Self-paced
  • Interactivity
  • Hands-on experience
  • Networking
  • Academic integrity
  • Assessment methods
  • Practical skills
  • Accreditation
  • Recognition
  • Self-discipline
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