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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007. Summarize the information by describing the main features of the charts and making comparisons where appropriate. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of selling a
magazine
 between 2003-2007, which is five countries included. Units are per
person
.
Overall
, countries A-C slightly sold decrease every
years
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year
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,
however
country
 D increase and
country
 E fluctuative. The higher
country
, who have
number
Correct article usage
a number
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 sold the
magazine
 is
country
 B every
years
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year
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. Start from around 50 persons
on
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in
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 the first
years
 and always fall until 40 persons between
country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
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 A and B sold the
magazine
, the
last
 value of
pattern
Correct article usage
the pattern
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in
Change the preposition
at
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 the end of
that
Correct determiner usage
apply
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country
 C be starting point.
Furthermore
, some of
those
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that country
those countries
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country
 mostly turn fall of the number.
In
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On
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 the other hand, lowest selling the
magazine
 is
country
Capitalize word
Country
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 E,
under
Correct pronoun usage
which under
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 10
person
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people
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 every
years
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year
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. One
country
, which is
above all
 is
country
 D and less
20
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than 20
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 persons and more
20
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than 20
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person
Change to a plural noun
people
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in
Change the preposition
at
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 the end of the
years
Fix the agreement mistake
year
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.
Specifictly
Correct your spelling
Specifically
,
case
Correct article usage
the case
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 of the
fluctuative
Correct your spelling
fluctuating
fluctuation
 pattern is
country
 E start from under 10
person
Change to a plural noun
people
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 sold the
magazine
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words magazine, person, years, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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