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The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate various changes that took place in the suburb of the residential town of Fosbury between 1980 and 2015. Generally speaking, it is obvious that there are several improvements in
the
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 of the road layout
as well as
 industrial, commercial and recreational facilities. The most
signicant
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significant
 change is the condition of a roundabout in the
center
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 of the town, which replaced a block of flats and
Grocer’s
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 shop.
Furthermore
, in the top
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 corner, terraced houses relocated to the left side, making way for the construction of a supermarket and a car park.
In contrast
, at the top of the map, houses and a hotel still remained unchanged.
Besides
, the recreational playground moved to the right, next to the new roundabout. Another noticeable
tranformation
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 is that
tennis
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court
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 in the South West of the area
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 upgraded to become a sports
center
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 and a car park was erected nearby.
Moreover
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 corner, the fields were converted industrially into warehouses.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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