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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005 (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005 (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provided highlights the figure of
visitors
 who went
for
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 worldwide travel in four different years . In general , it can be seen that Europe
always
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highest
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the highest
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 in others and Asia and
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the pacific
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pacific
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was
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were
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 high
excepted
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the
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 first year . Another key ,
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
always
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lowest
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the lowest
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 in all years . Looking at the
visitor
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visitors
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 in Europe and America in
further
 detail , the figures increased
substaintially
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substantially
. In reference to
Europe
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European
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visitors
 , it started at 280.2
million
 in 1990 and exploded to 400.2
million
 in the final year making it the highest level of
visitor
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visitors
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 in all five countries . Regarding
to
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Asia and
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the pacific’s
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pacific’s
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visitors
 originated at 80.5
million
 before
increased
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 to 113.2
million
at the end
 of the timeframe.
Similarly
 ,
America’
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visitors
was
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were
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 lowest with 80.5
million
 in the first year . Moving onto those who went to
Middel
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Middle
 East , which had the lowest
visitors
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 over all years . The visitor of Middle East
recorded
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was recorded
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 at 9.8
million
 in 1990 and more than sixfold by 2005 at 15.8
million
 . With regard to Africa , the number of tourists
were
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 in the range of 20
million
excepted
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 in 1990 the number of
visitors
only
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was only
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 18.2
million

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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