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The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart delineates the
gender's
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 proportion between
the
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secondary and
the
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higher education in four regions. In general, it is conspicuous that in Europe the percentage of individuals studying in both educational institutions is the highest among others.
In addition
, there is a different trend in
a
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gender type,
for
instance
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the
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men are the most significant number
in
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 adult students;
however
, in the school-aged
group
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 they experience
conversely
. Turning to Europe and Sub-Saharan Africa, the number of pupils learning in
the
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secondary educational institutions is twice higher than
another
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other
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 and all groups are dominated by
female
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females
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.
In contrast
, Sub-Saharan Africa generates the lowest proportion in
the
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secondary education (a fifth) compared to the rest category by just
across
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20%. As regards the other observed regions, there is no difference between Latin America and East Asia in the number of pupils by approximately 40%.
On the other hand
, the spread between both adult sexes in Latin America is wider than
East
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 Asia by 10%.
Furthermore
, the observed data reports that female students are less than
another
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other
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 sex in
the
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higher education.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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