Some people think that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the government instead of private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people indicate that scientific
experiment
must be taken care Fix the agreement mistake
experiments
by
the Change preposition
of by
government
instead
of private companies. In my opinion, I am agree
with the statement Change the verb form
agree
due to
the advantages and sourced
that Replace the word
sources
Correct article usage
the government's
government's
Change noun form
government
own
. Wrong verb form
owns
This
essay will examine the benefit
of Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
research
controlled by the government
.
To begin
, if the research
was taken over by the government
, it would result in there will be a lot
of funds to support the experiment. As we know, all of the investigation especially scientific research
requires a lot
of equipment or stakeholders to be done and it needs money to buy the equipment. For instance
, doing some scientific research
about psychology requires many people to fill out a question from an online form and they need to be stimulated to complete the form by giving them a present.
Secondly
, the government
has a lot
of collaboration with any
experts with multi-department related to the Correct quantifier usage
apply
research
. In fact, the research
must be not only related to one specific topic, but it all has a connection with other subject
. Change the wording
another subject
other subjects
For instance
, when there is a
experiment about microbiology in a food Change the article
an
such
as meat, soup, and rice, not only the microbiology expert needed, but there also
has to be a food expert and chemical professional in order to build a strategy, do a discussion, and find the best result.
To conclude
, the government
has a lot
of source
and Fix the agreement mistake
sources
capability
to make Fix the agreement mistake
capabilities
the
scientific Correct article usage
apply
research
become
better Verb problem
apply
such
as the source of funds and the collaboration as well as
the connection that government
have. Correct article usage
the government
Therefore
, I agree with the statement as
the Correct word choice
that
government
should be
carry out and control Unnecessary verb
apply
the
scientific experimentation.Correct article usage
apply
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task response
You have presented a clear position throughout the response, but your ideas need to be developed more comprehensively. Providing more depth and explanation to your arguments, as well as including counter-arguments and addressing them, could strengthen your answer.
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains an introduction and conclusion, which is good. However, make sure that your introduction clearly outlines the points that you will discuss. Your paragraphs should each focus on one main idea for better clarity. The conclusion could also be strengthened by summarizing your arguments more effectively.
task response
While some main points are present, they could be better supported by more specific examples and evidence. Develop your arguments further by citing research, studies, or real-world scenarios that back up your ideas. Avoid over-generalization and strive to provide concrete details.
Fully explain your ideas
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