the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The column chart illustrates how Australians bought and drank
coffee
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and tea in
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last
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4 weeks in five cities, based on the results of a survey.
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, it is evident that buying fresh
coffee
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among
people
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in Australia
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is less popular. Most
city
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dwellers went to a café for
coffee
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or tea and in just one
city
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,
people
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mostly bought instant
coffee
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in comparison with others. It can be observed from the chart that Australians were less interested in buying fresh
coffee
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. Most of the
city
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dwellers who bought fresh
coffee
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in
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last
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4 weeks
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are living in Sydney and the corresponding figure is roughly 43%.
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, the percentages of Brisbane and Adelaide residents who are drawn to drinking fresh
coffee
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, are the lowest at just under 35%.
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, except
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people
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who live in Adelaide, most Australians
went
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to a café in order to have a cup of
coffee
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or tea. The highest proportion of
people
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with
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habit
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stood at approximately 63%, and is associated with two cities, Melbourne and Hobart. Interestingly, Adelaide is the only
city
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where its residents, nearly 50% of them, preferred to buy instant
coffee
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people, city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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