The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
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The line graphs depict the transformations
owning
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in owning
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electrical items and durations
on
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of
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doing
housework
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in a country for 99 years from 1920 to 2019. The data have been calibrated in percentage and
hours
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.
Overall
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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of households with electrical goods went up in a decade.
In contrast
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, amount of
hours
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of
housework
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per household decreased. First and foremost, vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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accounted
up
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for up
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to 100%,
where
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whereas
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in 1920 both of
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this
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these
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things started the lowest at 30% and 0%. Meanwhile,
number
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a number
the number
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of
household
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households
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that had washing
machine
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machines
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saw a fluctuation.
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, in 1920 the percentage of
people
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with laundry
machine
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machines
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was 40% and continued rising to 70% in 1960 and fell to 63%. after
that
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that,
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it experienced
increase
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an increase
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to 72% in 2019, which was the peak.
In addition
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,
people
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in 1920 spent approximately 50
hours
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per week
to do
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doing
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housework
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such
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as doing laundry, preparing dishes and cleaning.
However
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, in the next 20 years, it dropped to 35
hours
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and slightly declined to 11
hours
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every week for
people
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to do
housework
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.
To sum up
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, in
this
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recent years more and more
people
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tend to
live
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leave
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the
housework
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behind compared to the past.
on the other hand
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, the number of having electric appliances increased.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, hours, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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