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The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first years as the projects are set up.

The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first years as the projects are set up.
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The table illustrates the projected costings
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 five years in American dollars for the three environmental projects for stable forestry.The pie chart demonstrates the expected expenditure distributed by four sections in the first year.
Overall
,South East Asia is anticipated to spend most on three projects
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 salaries expected to be highest among other regions In West Africa project costing
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for decreasing
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 to apply 30 million
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 Central America 20 and West Africa 10.5 million.
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 salaries.For office expenses and training planned to spend ten per
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.Despite that,30% will be used for set-up costs
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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