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The map illustrates the devlopment of Youngsville in New Zealand over a quarter of a century period,starting from 1980;while the picture indicates differences between a cinema in 1980 and itself now.

The map illustrates the devlopment of Youngsville in New Zealand over a quarter of a century period,starting from 1980;while the picture indicates differences between a cinema in 1980 and itself now.
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These two maps compare how Youngsville in New Zealand has been transformed since 1980 until now.
Overall
, there
is
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 considerable changes with
add
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 some new features and
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this
 country become more industrial.
On the other hand
, some facilities like
hospital
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hospitals
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,
school
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,
airport
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airports
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, and railway
station
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are have
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 no changes. In 1980, there was
woodland
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 in the north of
area
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the area
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 that now
develop
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 into
stadium
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 and parking areas.
Moreover
, still
in
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 the
up
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side of the map,
park
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a park
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 has been built next to the hospital which
stay
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 in the same position
after
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 more than 40 years later.
Move
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 to the middle part, the transportation has been upgraded so that there is not only
railway
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 station but
also
marine
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. Nowadays,
residents
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area
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 have been replaced
into
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 industrial
area
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areas
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. In the east below side, all of the houses have been reformed into
skyscrappers
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skyscrapers
,
while
 woodland has been demolished and replaced by
warehouse
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 and factories.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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