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Some people argue that the best way to becom successful in life is to get a university education. Others disagree with it and reckon that nowadays it is no longer true. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #becom #life #university #education
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 the accomplishments of educational
institution
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 has become an essential issue for future occupations, which can bring a successful life, a more modern style of entrepreneurship breaks the rule between undergraduates and graduates. A certificate might dominate an adolescent, but
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 there any other ways for us to become successful? There has been much concern about getting into
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 academy, which can provide immense satisfaction for academic progress. The
university
 cultivates teenagers for excellence in subjects
such
 as Geography, Arts and History. The wider the learning experience, the more the receptivity for most of the companies.
In addition
, the intensive studying for a subject keeps the students with curiosity and enthusiasm. By coming out of elites and striking for outstanding results,
learns
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 who gained more knowledge proved their determination to be a worker and entrepreneurs. It’s undeniable that a higher
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 of learning progress is a significant issue for us to work
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 by comparing with the improving achievers. Despite
university
 is crucial for undergraduates to get a job, more and more of them have turned themselves into entrepreneurs with none of any
university
 education, which becomes a critical effort for the argument. It is believed that newbies are required for working experience.
For instance
, streaming and video editing, which is no high training level needed.
Nevertheless
, recent statistics suggest that over 50% of entrepreneurs did not participate in any
university
 progress. Yet, not everything is plain sailing. Teenagers who want to have a successful experience in entrepreneurship need to undertake the risk of failure, which is extremely detrimental to their mental health with none of the support. They might get down easily with little achievement or be frustrated by the immense competition between other companies.
Although
 entrepreneurship has been heated recently,
educational
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 institution is still a perfect and suitable way for students and teenagers to work. It is highly suggested that a higher
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 of literacy can lead to a more sustainable and successful life.
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Task Achievement
The essay veers from formal academic language, consider diction carefully and consistently maintain formal tone.
Task Achievement
Provide a clear introduction and conclusion; introduction should appropriately frame the debate, and the conclusion should offer a definitive stance.
Task Achievement
Elaborate on your examples to more thoroughly support your arguments and demonstrate their relevance to your main points.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure logical flow between ideas and paragraphs by using appropriate transitional phrases and clear topic sentences.
Coherence & Cohesion
Develop a cohesive structure; each paragraph should address a single theme for enhanced readability and organization.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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