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The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years

The graph below shows the amount of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
#amount #waste #three #companies #period #years
The line graph illustrates
tonnes
 of
waste
 produced by three companies named A,
B
, and
C
 between
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year
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years
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 2000 to 2015.
Overall
,
company
C
 experienced an upward trend
while
 A and
B
 experienced a downward trend over the given
period
.
Furthermore
,
at the end
 of the
give
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given
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 time
period
 the highest amount of
waste
produced
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was produced
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 by
company
C
 and the lowest
reported
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was reported
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 by
company
B
. In 2000,
company
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Company
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C
 disposed
around
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of around
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 4
tonnes
 of
waste
 as the least among all but, over the next decade it rose gradually to about 7
tonnes
.
However
, after 2010, it outraced
the
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company
B
 and
C
 respectively and reached its peak of approximately 10
tonnes
 of
waste
. At the beginning of the
period
,
company
 A was the lowest
waste
 producer and it was around 12
tonnes
. The figure started to decline rapidly from the beginning, and reached its
the
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lowest point of about 8
tonnes
 in 2015. In 2000
company
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Company
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C
 started to release around 8
tonnes
 of
waste
 and in the following 5
years
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years,
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 it experienced significant growth to about 10
tonnes
.
Then
 from 2005 to 2015 it showed
sharp
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a sharp
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 fall and hit
the
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its
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 lowest point
about
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of about
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 3
tonnes
,
became
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becoming
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 the least
waste
 produced for the rest of the
period
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, waste, b, c, company, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • waste production
  • company
  • trends
  • significant
  • fluctuations
  • surges
  • reductions
  • correlations
  • environmental policies
  • technological advancements
  • units of measurement
  • time period
  • stability
  • milestones
  • graph analysis
  • pattern recognition
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