The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals I different parts of the world. Sumarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The graph line depicts information about international tourist arrivals in five countries from 1995 until 2010. It is clear from the graph that the
USA
and France
rinks the highest numbers and they met in 2010 with the same number.
The tourists arrived in Egypt
in 1995 nearly 10 million
as same as Brazil. Between 1995 and 2000 Egypt
increased smoothly. However
. Brazil recorded lower than Egypt
in the same period.
Malaysia ranks the third highest number of tourist arrivals with more than 20 million
in 1995. In addition
, the period from 2000 until 2010 was increasing.
France
achieved the second highest with 30 million
in 1995,
and uplifted the dopple in 2000. In 2010 Remove the comma
apply
France
met with the USA
at the same point approximately 90 million
tourists.
Moreover
, the USA
stood out with more than 90 million
tourist arrivals which is the highest number.
To sum up
, we could say that although
Malaysia was higher than Egypt
and Brazil, but still much lower than the USA
and France
.Submitted by Yousef
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