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The tablet and chart below give information on the police budget

The tablet and chart below give information on the police budget
#tablet #information #police #budget
The tablet and pie chart illustrate
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distribution
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the distrubution
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distrubution
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distribution
 of
money
 that belonged to
police
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the police
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budget
 from 2017 to 2018 in one area of Britain
Overall
, there were three main incomes of
police
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the police
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budget
 which were National Government, Local Taxes, and Other sources and
this
budget
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was distrubuted
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distrubuted
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distributed
 on salaries, technology,
building
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buildings
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 and transport.
Furthermore
, there was an upward trend in all three different sources
while
 the
money
 spent on salaries was the majority of
contribution
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the contribution
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İn
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In
 2017, the amount of
money
 on
National
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the National
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 Government was 175.5
million
pounds
 and rose to 177.8
million
pounds
 in the following year.
Moreover
, Local Taxes
was
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increased from 91.2
million
pounds
 to 102.3
million
pounds
 and other sources showed a slight
increased
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 from 38
million
pounds
 to 38.5
million
pounds
.
Thus
, the total
budget
of
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police
 showed
upward
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an upward
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 trend from 304.7
million
pounds
 to 318.6
pounds
 between
this
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these
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 two years
İn
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In
 terms of how
money
 spent, the majority of
police
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the police
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budget
 went to salaries which was for
officer
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officers
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 and staff, dropping slightly from 75
percent
 in 2017 to 69
percent
 in 2018.
Meanwhile
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 the proportion of building and transport remained
constantly
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, at 17
percent
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per cent
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 each year. An opposite pattern
occured
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occurred
 in the category of technology, it is figured a sharp rose from 8
percent
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per cent
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 to 14
percent
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per cent
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 following years, which was the lowest rate during the given period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, police, budget, million, pounds, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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