The charts show the main methodof transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009

The charts show the main methodof transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009
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The pie charts present the main method of vehicle of
people
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moving to a university in two different periods (2004 and 2009).
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, both in 2004 and 2009,
cars
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and
buses
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were the two most popular transportation for
people
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coming to the university
while
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trains
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and walking were the least picked method of
transport
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. In 2004,
Cars
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dominated the numbers as just more than half of
people
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who utilize
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for
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to the university at 51%. For the second-picked vehicle,
Buses
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recorded at one-third and below the
buses
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there were three types of
transport
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which contain no more than 10% of the figures. They are Bicycles
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at 9%, and 4% of
people
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used their feet.
Trains
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stated at only 3% making it the least popular
transport
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. In 2009, there was an increase
number
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in using any transportation except
cars
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.
Buses
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jumped into the most popular at 46% followed by
cars
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who dropped to 26%. The
number
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of
people
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using bicycles grew almost double, at 16%. Both feet and
trains
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also
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experienced an increase at 6% and 4%.
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, the rise in the
number
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of
people
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using
trains
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did not change it as the lowest
number
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compared to any other type of
transport
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cars, buses, trains, transport, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • method of transport
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • cars
  • bicycles
  • walking
  • public transport
  • popular choice
  • reasons
  • changes
  • infrastructure improvements
  • impact
  • transport choices
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