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Developments of technology are causing environmental problems. Some people think the solution is that everyone accepts a simpler life, while others believe that technology can solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many environmental woes have been attributed to the
use
 of cars, electronic products, air-conditioning, refrigerators and other products. I would argue that
technology
 is the solution to these
problems
,
although
 living a green
lifestyle
 can
also
 be important. Some
People
 consider living a simple
life
 as a significant step to tackling environmental woes. Modern
life
 relies heavily on different kinds of machines and devices,
while
 a green
lifestyle
 minimises the
use
 of any kind of
technology
. By changing lifestyles,
such
 as avoiding the excessive
use
 of electrical appliances, environmentally-conscious
people
 argue that electricity consumption can be reduced and that electronic
waste
 will decline as well.
By comparison
, they do not count on technological change to remedy the situation since even the most environmentally friendly
technology
 involves the
use
 of plastic and metals, which can eventually become solid
waste
 and cause environmental destruction.
On the other hand
, some
people
 may see
technology
 as the solution to environmental
problems
 caused by modern
life
. The growing concern about the environmental cost of modern lifestyles has pushed innovators to slow or even avoid
the
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damage to the natural world. There has been meaningful progress in the development of clean
energy
,
such
 as wind power, solar power and other renewable resources, which can be harnessed to generate power without causing air pollution. Some
eco-benign
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 inventions,
such
 as electric or hybrid cars have been promoted as a replacement
of
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 traditional cars to cut down on greenhouse gas emissions. Without
the
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technological innovations, the environmental
problems
 caused by our everyday
activity
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is
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 likely to continue because even the most sustainable
lifestyle
 can create
waste
 and entail
energy
 consumption. In my view,
technology
 alone does not negate the damage caused by our activity to the environment, and
lifestyle
 change is equally important. Population expansion has driven the demand for
energy
 and raw
material
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materials
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, and despite living a simple
life
,
people
 will find that
energy
 consumption and
waste
 management will continue to cause environmental damage. In
this
 case, going green should be supported by adopting advanced
eco-benign
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eco-friendly
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 products. Meanwhile, in spite of the tremendous
advance
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advances
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 in green
technology
, it is virtually impossible to avoid the environmental impact of electricity generation and
waste
 disposal;
in other words
,
technology
 is not a remedy for all
problems
 unless
people
 lead a sustainable
lifestyle
. In conclusion, we should take
initiative
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the initiative
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 to reduce the impact of our
lifestyle
 on the environment, as
technology
 cannot tackle environmental
problems
.
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coherence cohesion
You've done a good job structuring the essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion which is good for coherence and cohesion. However, aim for a more balanced development of ideas in each body paragraph. Ensure each viewpoint discussed is given equal weight and depth to enhance the logical flow and presentation.
task achievement
While your task response includes both views and your opinion, it could be improved further by providing more specific examples to support the arguments. Examples help in demonstrating a thorough understanding of the topic and contribute to the clarity and persuasiveness of your argumentation.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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