Write a letter to local authorities by requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area. Mention about the current sport facilities available What kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced *How the new sports facilities would be a help for the people in your age group

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Dear Sir, I am Tanya Luthra from Saharanpur, India. I am working at Deloitte and live in the Govind Nagar Society near landmark SAM College. I am writing

this

letter to request you to add some new

games

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facilities for the people of

this

area. Presently, there are many

sports

facilities available in the town

such

as cricket, basketball and football in the

sports

complex club.

However

, I have observed there are no

sports

facilities available during the evening hours where people of my age can enjoy games. Near the sport complex club there is a small ground which is empty and I think that ground can be leveraged to introduce new indoor

sports

such

as table tennis, lawn tennis and swimming.

This

would not only benefit the people of my age group but

also

the younger children

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this

area.

Such

a place is much needed which will not only help us to learn some new

sports

but

also

involve some physical activities which will be beneficial for our health. Hoping for a careful consideration of

this

suggestion! Yours faithfully, Tanya

Submitted by TANULUTHRA95 on Fri Jan 12 2024

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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182 words

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