The charts show the main methodof transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009

The charts show the main methodof transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009
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The two pie charts illustrate the percentages of the five major ways of
transportation
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,
such
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as cars, walking,
buses
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, trains and bicycles that were used by people to reach their university in the years between 2004 and 2009. It is clear from the charts that the most
transportation
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methods used are vehicles and
buses
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in both years. There was a noticeable difference in car usage in 2004 when the percentage was almost more than half in comparison to the year 2009 which was around 30%.
This
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sudden decrease was
due to
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the car parking charges which had started in 2006. A closer examination of the figures for the
students
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who actually were using
buses
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as a
transportation
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method to their school revealed the greatest proportion in 2009, which was nearly 5
students
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in every 10 using
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method.
On the other hand
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, in 2004,
students
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were using
buses
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lesser
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less
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than cars about 3
students
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in every 10.
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happened
due to
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the new bus stop station that had been constructed in 2008.
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, bicycle usage rose approximately twice from 2004 to 2009. The rest of the mentioned
transportation
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ways,
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as train and walking, remained in about constant proportions, which was around 4% and 6% respectively. These plots show that people were using
buses
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more than automobiles in 2009.
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emphasises how public
transportation
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had more added value than cars in the past years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, buses, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • method of transport
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • cars
  • bicycles
  • walking
  • public transport
  • popular choice
  • reasons
  • changes
  • infrastructure improvements
  • impact
  • transport choices
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