the chart below shows the changes that took place in 3 different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 - 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the changes that took place in 3 different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 - 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how many burglaries, car thefts and robberies
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occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
, burglaries saw the most drastic decrease over the
period
of ten years
while
robberies remained relatively stable throughout the
period
. Car thefts,
firstly
,
demonstated
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demonstrated
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a fluctuation and
then
decreased slowly. The number of burglaries was just below 3500 incidents at the beginning and
then
this
value slightly rose to around 3750 before falling drastically to about 1200 over the next four years.
This
figure fluctuated between roughly 1200 and 1500 incidents from 2008 to 2012. Car thefts stayed relatively stable at around 2750 over two years before fluctuating between
this
level and just over 2000 between 2005 and 2008.
After
this
fluctuation
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it grew to just over 2500 before declining to about 2400 incidents
at the end
of the
period
. The number of robberies hovered between roughly 500 and around 900 throughout the entire
period
.
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