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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The
charts
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 show the sources of
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police
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the police
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budget
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 and its allocation in one British area in 2017 and 2018
years
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.
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, there are
three
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charts
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, where the table illustrates the sources of
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police
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the police
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budget
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 in
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million
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millions
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 of
pounds
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, having the highest one in
National
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the National
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 Government, and two pie
charts
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 consist of
three
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 segments, where ‘Salaries’ has the biggest proportion in both
years
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. Turning to the details, the table consists of
three
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 sources of
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police
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the police
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budget
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, namely ‘National Government’, ‘Local Taxes’ and ‘Other sources’ with the total sum for both
years
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, 2017 and 2018. The first
item
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 of income for the
police
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budget
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 shows the highest amount of money, having a slight increase in 2018 (2.3
million
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pounds
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).
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, the second
item
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, which is connected with the local taxes, had the biggest difference between
two
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the two
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years
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, representing the increase
of
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in
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police
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the police
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budget
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 at 11.1
million
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pounds
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. As for the
last
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 category, it did not have a large rise, showing 38.5
million
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pounds
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 in 2018.
According to
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 the pie
charts
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, they represent
three
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 categories, namely ‘Salaries’, ‘Technology’ and ‘Buildings and transport’, having the highest proportion in the first one in 2017 and 2018 (75% and 69%, respectively). The second
item
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, which belongs to ‘Technology’, had a significant increase in distribution, from 8% to 14%. The
last
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item
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, connected with buildings and transport did not have any changes in the allocation of money and it shows 17% in both
years
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charts, police, budget, years, three, million, pounds, item with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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