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Band 4.5

We can access information from the internet easily. Some people say that libraries are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays
internet
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 provides a lot of information and can be easily accessed,
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 most people
deemed
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libraries
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are
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not essential. I disagree with
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 statement and
this
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 essay will explain why
libraries
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 are still considered to be the best place to relax and
provides
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 more
detail
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informations
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information
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 than
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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.
Firstly
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,
libraries
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 are identic with
its
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 calm and quiet ambience. It is the common rule of
library
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the library
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 to not speak loudly and stay quiet,
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 it creates a very good ambience to focus on our activities. Many people
likes
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 to go and just sit in the library because the calm atmosphere helps them to focus
in
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 finishing their
task
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tasks
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, university student go to
library
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the library
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 to finish their essay. Because of the No-Speaking rules, not many distractions are present,
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 making it easier for them to
working
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 on their
works
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Secondly
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,
libraries
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 are the perfect place to look for the age-old
informations
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information
pieces of information
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. Though the
internet
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 can give a wide range
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of informations
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informations
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information
pieces of information
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, sometimes some knowledge that
are
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is
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 from a very long ago
are
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 difficult to
obtained
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.
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, old transcripts of some trading from the medieval era, or an old war agreement from
the
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World War II. You can find them in
libraries
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 by asking the librarian, and they will give you pointers on where to find them. In conclusion, I believe some functions of the
libraries
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 can not be replaced by the
internet
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such
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 as working as
place
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a place
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 to work on our assignments and providing
hisotory
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history
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
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 from years ago.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear and logical structure. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea supported by relevant explanations or examples. Use paragraphing effectively to organize your points.
coherence cohesion
In the introduction and conclusion, it's crucial to clearly state your position on the topic. Make sure to restate the topic and your viewpoint in the conclusion to reinforce your argument.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with specific examples or explanations to strengthen your argument. While some examples are provided, they could be more detailed and relevant to the prompt.
task achievement
Ensure you fully respond to all parts of the task. The response must address the prompt directly and develop a position with relevant ideas and examples. Try to offer a balanced view if the task requires discussing different perspectives.
task achievement
Ideas should be clear and developed comprehensively. Aim to make each sentence contribute to the overall argument or point being made, and ensure your essay progresses logically from introduction to conclusion.
task achievement
Include relevant and specific examples to illustrate your points. Use these to demonstrate broader understanding and application of the topic in question. The provided examples could be more grounded and specific to clearly show how libraries provide unique benefits.
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