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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Overall, the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today’s world.

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Nowadays,
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 has been globally used by a
lot
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 of
people
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 for daily life. I believe the widespread use of the
internet
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 is impacting
people
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 in a positive way for at least two reasons.
Firstly
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, it gave us access to a
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 of
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, and
secondly
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, it
allow
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 us to communicate easily with our loved ones.
To begin
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Internet
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 provides a
lot
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 of
informations
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 and
allow
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 us to them easily. We can find the
data
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 we want simply just by opening our computer or laptop that has been connected
with
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 the
internet
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. By putting keywords in search
engine
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such
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 as Google, we can obtain a
lot
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 of knowledge almost instantly.
This
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 is beneficial for
people
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 who their
mainly
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 job is to look for
data
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.
For instance
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, a student who has to write
thesis
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a thesis
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 as a requirement for their graduation. Their hypothesis and statement in their thesis
has
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 to be supported by
data
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 or facts. Using
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the internet
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, they can easily gain
this
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data
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 without having to go to
library
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the library
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.
As a result
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, they can finish their assignments efficiently.
Moreover
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, the widespread access to
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also
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allow
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 us to communicate with families or friends that are far from us.
People
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use
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 to have to go to
phone
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a phone
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 booth or send a letter to communicate. We need more than several days to wait for their
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. The
internet
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 has made
this
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 way of communication easier. We can chat and talk about our days with other
people
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 online. For
people
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 who have to live
in
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 another side of the country because of work or study, using
a chat apps
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a chat app
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 like
Whatsapp
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 will allow them to speak with their family instantly without having to wait for three to seven days for them to respond. In conclusion, I believe
global
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 use of
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internet
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 has a
lot
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 of positive
impact
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in
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 our daily life to help us
such
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 as giving us an easy way to access
informations
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information
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,
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 and connecting us with families and friends effortlessly.

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coherence cohesion
While your essay presents clear main points, there could be an improvement in the way these are developed and expanded upon. It's essential that each idea is fully explained and supported with detailed examples. This practice assists in creating a more persuasive argument.
task achievement
Your response to the task is adequate; you have expressed your opinion and provided reasons for your viewpoint. However, there should be more complex ideas and critical analysis. It is recommended to delve deeper into the implications or contrasting views to showcase a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
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