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The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts illustrate how 4 countries generated
electricity
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 from 3 resources over 5 years.
Overall
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,
while
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 the majority of energy used to produce
electricity
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 in
India
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 and Vietnam
were
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 fossil fuels, the opposite could be seen in Morocco and
Sweden
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. It was noticeable that nuclear was only appeared in
India
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 and
Sweden
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. Accounting for 82%, the production of
power
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 from fossil fuels was dominant in
India
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 and minor in
Sweden
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, at 4%.
In contrast
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, renewable energy in
India
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 was less than one-fourth compared to
Sweden
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 which made up 4%.
Electricity
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 generated by nuclear
power
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 in
India
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 was the lowest at 4% which was 90% less than
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Sweden
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in Sweden
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.
Similarly
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, hydraulic
power
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 took up 14% of
electricity
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 production in
India
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 and added up to/ comprised / consisted of 25% of
Sweden
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’s production, at 52%. It was noticeable that hydraulic
power
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 contributed to most of the
electricity
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 in
Sweden
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.
On the other hand
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, in Morocco, there was a difference of 90% /a 90% difference between the percentage of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 and fossil fuels. Meanwhile, Vietnam saw a minimal difference between the 2 types which was less than 10%. Strikingly, nuclear
power
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 was not used in these nations.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, india, sweden, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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