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Band 5

Some people think that machine translation is highly developed in today's society. Therefore, it is not necessary for students to learn a foreign language. What's your opinion?

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Learning a foreign
language
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 is essential for international students and is the smouldering issue of today's social life and is extremely arguable
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 its unquestionable significance.
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 matter is being agreed upon
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 disagreed by the society
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 its own ideologies and views.In my opinion, it is necessary for all to learn the International
language
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. One group of
people
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 strongly favours that all the students should learn
international
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an international
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language
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 for their own needs.If
someone
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 has to work or study in abroad
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someone
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 should have to know their national
language
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 in which country they are planning to go.It will help them to communicate with others and it will help in their daily life.Without knowing their
language
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someone
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 can not communicate with the local
people
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 of that country.
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,
language
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 is the most important part of their studying or job.If
someone
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 has not learned the
language
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 of the State in which
someone
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 is planning to go, It will be hard for them to survive there. They can not express or tell others what they need or what they can do for them. On the
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, Another group of
people
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 assert that it is not necessary to learn the Local
language
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 of the city or state in which they are travelling because machine translation is highly developed in today's life.
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 , Google Translator is an app in which everyone can translate his mother
language
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to
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 any desired
language
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 within seconds.
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, he can
also
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 speak through that app or can write easily from that app, So
this
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 is why
people
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 don't take it seriously to have command of that
language
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. In conclusion, in my opinion, it is necessary for everyone to have a command of the
language
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 in which he will be going to spend his valuable years.
Someone
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 could lose their mobile or could lose the internet connection in any situation, So
Someone
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 has to prepare themself for any kind of situation to deal best.

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coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphing and ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea. In this essay, ideas can feel a bit scattered, which affects the logical structure.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to use a range of cohesive devices (linking words) to connect ideas within and across paragraphs. Use these devices with more accuracy and control.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion should clearly address the question and state your position. Your conclusion does this, but the introduction could more explicitly outline the points that will be discussed.
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A complete response to the essay question includes a clear position throughout the response with relevant, extended and supported ideas. Ensure your opinion is clear and maintained and extend your main points with more developed arguments and relevant examples.
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Ideas should be explained comprehensively with relevant detail. Aim for more depth in your arguments by giving detailed and specific illustrations of your ideas.
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When using examples, they should be specific and relevant to the point you are making. Be careful not to use hypothetical scenarios as concrete examples.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • machine translation
  • foreign language acquisition
  • cognitive abilities
  • cultural understanding
  • nuance
  • communication skills
  • human connection
  • idioms
  • context
  • error-prone languages
  • global job market
  • versatile
  • cultural content
  • competitive edge
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