The chart below shows the type of transport young people in four countries prefer to use.

The chart below shows the type of transport young people in four countries prefer to use.
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The bar chart gives us information about adolescents' preferences in the use of vehicles in Great Britain, The USA, Germany, and
France
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.
Overall
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, the
car
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is the top choice among the others,
while
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motorcycles mostly being the least. The rank of the usages of some transports mentioned in both Great Britain and
France
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are the same, which says
car
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as the highest, followed by bikes, and
lastly
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is a motorcycle.
However
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, there are several differences in those countries,
while
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the usage of cars in
France
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is reaching almost 80%, the English are only hit around 60%.
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, the percentage of bicycle users in the UK is more than half of
France
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. Not only in those two countries where most of the people are choosing a
car
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to go places
,
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, but
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the teenagers in the USA
also
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picked the same choice, it can be seen from the rates that said approximately 60%. 40% of the young in the USA are still considered motorcycle and bike, which are indicated by the rates at 30% and 10% respectively. In comparison, young people in Germany rather ride their bikes
instead
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of their
car
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,
as a result
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, the percentage is only 5% apart,
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the motorcycle is the lowest option.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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