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The chart below shows the type of transport young people in four countries prefer to use.

The chart below shows the type of transport young people in four countries prefer to use.
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The bar chart illustrates
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the precentage
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precentage
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percentage
 of transportation that young
people
 prefer to
use
 in Great Britain,
USA
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the USA
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,
Germany
 and France. In general, it can be seen that
car
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cars
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more
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are more
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 popular in Great Britain,
USA
 and France.
Whereas
, the most popular vehicle in
Germany
 is
Bicycle
. As presented in
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the graph
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,
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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only
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are only
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 popular in
USA
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the USA
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. Not in
other country
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another country
other countries
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. In my opinion,
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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more
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are more
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 popular in Asia not in Europe. Young
people
 in Great Britain prefer to
use
car
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a car
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 than
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a motorcyle
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motorcyle
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motorcycle
 and
bicycle
. at 60% of total. Meanwhile, only 10%
folks
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of folks
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 like
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 as their accommodation. It is
similiar
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similar
with
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to
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 France where
car
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the car
a car
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 is the most favorite transportation, and the lowest popular is
motorcycle
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a motorcycle
the motorcycle
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. In
USA
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the USA
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,
people
 still choose
car
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a car
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 as their favorite transport. But, they prefer to
use
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 than
bicycle
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bicycles
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. As the lowest number of
people
 only 10%. Young residents in
Germany
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have
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has
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have
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different
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a different
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preferences
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preference
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preferences
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. They prefer to
use
bicycle
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bicycles
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 as
number
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the number
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 one of transport
intead
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instead
 of
car
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cars
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 and
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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. Apparently, some
people
 in
Germany
has
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have
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healthy
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a healthy
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life style
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lifestyle
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 and participate in
reduce
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reducing
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 carbon
in
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on
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 the earth. The difference
of
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in
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 young
people
's
preference
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preferences
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in
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for
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 transport can be influenced by various
reason
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reasons
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. One of them is their
life style
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lifestyle
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.
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