The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

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chart summarises the number of Olympic awards won by different countries.

Overall

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, we can see that one country is completely dominating the rest of the countries.

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, the other eleven countries are pretty similar in terms of medals won. The USA has more awards than the

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nations combined. Looking at the information in more detail, the US has almost 2000 Olympic medals, of which 950 are gold, more than 600 are silver, and another 700 are bronze.

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is a lot; if we compare these statistics to the second most awarded nation, the Soviet Union, they only have 1,000 in total, not just gold or silver.

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, eleven different nations are fighting to be the second or third best nation at the highest level. In fact, it seems to be more balanced because from the third nation to the

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there are only 500 medals from one to the other. To confirm that, we can see that the difference between Germany and Italy is less than ten victories.

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Jan 3, 2024

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The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

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