The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve 

different countries.
The chart gives information about the amount of awards during the
olympics
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Olympic
Olympics
games of 12 countries.
Overall
, the USA has more than 1000 total medals being the first country with a difference.
By contrast
, the other 11 countries all have less than 1000 total awards and are pretty equivalent except 3 of them
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have a few more.
Firstly
, we can see that the North American country has around 2,300 medals. In short, there is a big difference because it is the only one able to reach more than 1,000.
For instance
, China being the country
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awards has 6 times less than the USA. Looking at the information in detail, it is possible to identify how tied for prizes the 12 states, excluding the USA, are. In fact,
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the Soviet Union, the United Kingdom and France. Below those, all the nations have almost the same number of medals with no more than 500.
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