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The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
The bar chart above depicts the
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 of medals achieved by twelve distinct countries.
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, the USA is the country with the most medals won.
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, the number of prizes does not coincide with the size of the country. The USA is the place with the most medals won, with over 2250 prizes achieved in total. Which means it has more than twice the number of rewards as the second highest achiever, the Soviet Union , with about 1000 rewards. The rest are not even close to the first and second competitors. In fact, the number of inhabitants does not have any influence on the results. China,
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, is the second place with the fewest prizes, with about 400 of them;
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, it is the most populated area in the world. And France , which is way less populated than Japan, is the third in line, whilst Japan is
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