The bar chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.

The chart gives data about the amount of awards during the Olympic games of 12 countries.

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, the USA has more than 1,000 total medals being the first country by far.

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, the other 11 countries all have less than 1,000 total awards and are pretty equivalent except 3 of them who have a few more.

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, we can see that the North American country has around 2,300 medals. In short, there is a big difference because it is the only one able to reach more than 1,000.

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, China being the country on the list with fewer awards has 6 times less than the USA. Looking at the information in detail, it is possible to identify how tied for prizes the 12 states, excluding the USA, are. In fact, the list follows the Soviet Union, the United Kingdom and France. Below those, all the nations have almost the same number of medals with no more than 500.

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Jan 3, 2024

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