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The graph below show the value of clothing exported from Bangladesh between 1998 and 2012, and the pie chart shows the destinations and value of exported clothing in 2012.

The line chart reveals the number of clothes exported from Bangladesh from 1998 to 2012,
while
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 the pie chart represents the country's destinations and the
value
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 of exported apparel in 2012.
Overall
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, it is apparently seen that the
value
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 of clothing has an upward trend and reached a peak in the
last
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 period; meanwhile, in the destination country European Union has the highest amount and Turkey
on the contrary
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. Looking at the line graph in detail, in 1998, the amount of exports just came up with a small number, approximately 2%. Afterwards, it increased gradually from 1992 to 2004, standing at just over 5%.
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, it was a significant climb in the
last
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 two periods and reached a high at a fifth.
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, in 2012 European Union dominated the percentages at 60% with a
value
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 of 11,38
billion
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USD
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. After that, followed by the USA, which stood at just under a quarter (
value
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 of 4,53
billion
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USD
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).
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other countries came in third place at well below 10% with a
value
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 of 1,55
billion
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USD
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.
Finally
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, the
last
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 three countries (Canada, Japan, and Turkey) had percentages of 8% combined (a
value
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 of 1,63
billion
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USD
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).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words value, billion, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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