In many countries around the world,rural people are moving to cities,so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays,many countries are dealing with
significantly
diminishing Correct article usage
a significantly
figure
of people living in Fix the agreement mistake
figures
countryside
,Add an article
the countryside
while
the number of induviduals
moving to Correct your spelling
individuals
metropolices
is rapidly increasing. Correct your spelling
metropolises
metropolis
Although
,
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apply
this
phenomenon has both positive and negative sides, I believe that it's
disadvantages Correct your spelling
its
outweight
Correct your spelling
outweigh
advantages
,because of several conditions.
Correct article usage
the advantages
Firstly
,it cannot be denied,that urbanization provides
Verb problem
has
huge
impact on the development of economics. Add an article
a huge
However
, rural
population is faced with crucial consequences,Add an article
the rural
such
as shortage
of young generation and Correct article usage
a shortage
lack
of labour resources in villages. The most notable influence has been observed in Correct article usage
a lack
agrucultural
and farming Correct your spelling
agricultural
spheares
,Correct your spelling
spheres
wherease
people of retirement age are not available to work effectively. Correct your spelling
where
Hence
, the quality of food and organic products is sharply declining. Moreover
,there are some countrysides
in Italy,France and Greece,that have Replace the word
countries
been
completely disappeared Unnecessary verb
apply
due to
massive migration.
Secondly
,Correct article usage
the arising
arising
demand Correct your spelling
rising
in
higher Change preposition
for
salary
,better education and facilities,are the main reasons why people move to capitals. Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
Therefore
,big cities are becoming overcrowded and traffic congestions of roads,might be considered as a result
of this
tendency. Tackling with carbon emissions and environemental
issues is the most important problem of modern cities. Correct your spelling
environmental
In addition
,poor air quality may provoque
health problems and diseases like asthma,Correct your spelling
provoke
allergy
or even Fix the agreement mistake
allergies
lung's
cancer.
In conclusion, though relocation to urban areas Change noun form
lung
have
numerous merits,Change the verb form
has
it's
Correct your spelling
its
negatory
drawbacks,Correct word choice
negative
for example
: distinction
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the distinction
a distinction
of
small towns,deterioration of Change preposition
between
healty
products and degradation of ecology,which leads to serious illnesses should be taken Correct your spelling
healthy
health
to
consideration.Change preposition
into
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