Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, the differences between countries are decreasing, as purchasing a product is possible all around the world.
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worldwide has positive and negative effects, I believe that the disadvantages of the development outweigh the advantages.
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, today most youngsters, all over the world, are attracted to fashionable clothes and follow the changing modern industry. When there is only one dominant culture, citizens will become more and more similar to each other, until the point that they are no longer identifiable from others. Linking Words
Overall
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phenomenon can lead to a society with no diversity in it. Linking Words
In addition
, transportation can lead to environmental issues from one country to another. Linking Words
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regard, damage to the environment will bring out global warming, extinction of endangered species, and serious health problems.
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, in my opinion, its negative effects in terms of damaging the environment and loss of cultural diversity override its positives.Linking Words
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