The only way to improve safety on our roads is to give much stricter punishments for driving offences. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whoever commits a crime on roadways there is only one way to safeguard the life of a people and

that is

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by providing harsh penalties to drivers. I totally disagree with

this

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and think that accidents might occur at any time and that punishment is not always a solution.

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, on highways, there is a maximum possibility of accidents and most of them are unintentional. We can not be sure when exactly it is going to happen on a

road

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trip.

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, there is a zebra cross nearby but if a child crosses from the other side of a

road

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where he is not supposed to and a car running at a great speed collides and dies on the spot

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it is unfair to say it's driver's fault.

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instead

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of penalizing or making laws against drivers people should be made aware of traffic rules and regulations.

On the other hand

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, accidents are inevitable but they can be lessened to some extent.

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, in Nepal, the majority of highway roadways are in the worst condition meaning they are not paved well. In

this

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case, if a driver drives normally all day and has years of experience but if the condition of the

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is poor

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someday he might have to face the consequences. That's why it is necessary to refurbish roads timely.

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, to avoid incidents on roads ,rather than providing penalties to drivers it is crucial to provide knowledge to pupils about traffic rules and maintenance of the

road

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time and again.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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257 words

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