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The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.
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The chart shows information about
British
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 Emigration to selected destinations
such
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 as
Australia
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, Spain, New
Zealand
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, The USA, and France in 2004, 2005, 2006, and 2007. As can be seen from the chart, it is obvious that
Australia
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 is the popular place which
British
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 emigrators choose to live in every
year
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. In detail, there was the most chosen destination in
Australia
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 in 2006 at just over 50000
while
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 other countries have under 35000.
Also
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,
Australia
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 was twice as high as New
Zealand
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, USA, and France, composed 40000 to 20000 in 2007 and 2005. Looking at the details, there was a decrease in both Spain and New
Zealand
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year
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 on
year
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. The next most popular country for
British
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 migrants to move to was Spain, with approximately 35000 in three years, and in the
last
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year
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, the figure dropped, to under 30000. In conclusion,
Australia
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 is the most popular of people who emigrate from
British
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whereas
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 New
Zealand
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 and the USA are the lowest amount.
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