Your child’s school is planning a field trip outside the country for 3 days and is asking for parents to come along. Write a letter Asking about the trip Explaining why you want to join Explain how you can help out

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
regarding an abroad school trip which is going to be held next month for 3 days, with parents to accomplish with them. My child, Martha, is studying in standard 5, so I want to know something basic about future planned trips. In which country is the trip supposed to be held and during their stay which type of activities, do kids have to do?
Furthermore
, all pupils need to follow any type of dress code or they can wear whatever they want. As my baby is still very young and she has never been anywhere else alone, I am a little bit worried for her which made me deeply concerned to join you. I understand you all are good at taking care of them.
Additionally
, I
also
want to understand which type of activities will they perform and how it will be beneficial for them in future. Being a part of an international event management company, I can help you with the booking for location and flight booking with great deals. As I have some contacts in some countries, in case of emergency you can even contact them. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Jen Kale
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coherence cohesion
While the letter has a clear opening and closing, along with identifiable paragraphs, it could benefit from enhanced logical structuring for coherence. Connecting sentences within paragraphs to ensure a smooth and clear progression of ideas will improve readability and cohesion.
task achievement
The letter generally addresses all parts of the task, but some areas lack detail. Elaborate on specific aspects such as potential ways of assistance besides flight and location bookings, and clarify questions regarding the trip to make the response more complete.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Field trip
  • Overseas excursion
  • Parental participation
  • Enrichment
  • Educational objectives
  • Cultural immersion
  • Supervision
  • Logistics
  • Coordination
  • Safety measures
  • Travel arrangements
  • Accommodations
  • Child development
  • Practical learning environments
  • Hands-on assistance
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