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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment. Only large companies and goverments can make a difference. What extent do you agree or disagree.

#individuals #environment #companies #goverments #difference
Most people think that
individuals
 can do nothing to
keeping
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keep
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 the
environment
.
While
 only large companies and
goverments
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governments
government
 can make
difference
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a difference
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. I
am completely disagree
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completely disagree
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 with
this
 statement. I would to like explain why
individuals
 can
to
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apply
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improve the
environment
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also
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and olso
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olso
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also
 play a crucial role in environmental, conservation, alongside
goverments
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governments
 and companies.
paragra
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paragraph
To begin
 with,
individuals
 can protect the
environment
 through small things. Other than that, individual efforts
such
 as reducing waste, recycling, and conserving energy contribute to environmental improvement.
For example
, every individual has a rubbish bin at home and has trees to reduce air pollution. It can
also
 be said that
individuals
 have a role to play in maintaining the
environment
.
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introduction conclusion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion which are crucial for framing the argument and summarizing the main points. To improve, ensure to begin with a clear introductory statement that paraphrases the question and ends with a succinct conclusion that restates your position.
logical structure
The logical structure of the essay is weak, which makes it hard to follow the argument. To enhance this, organize your essay into paragraphs each with a single clear idea, supported by specific examples or explanations.
supported main points
Your main points need to be developed with more specific examples and explanations. Personal anecdotes, statistics, or facts can strengthen your argument and demonstrate a clear understanding of the topic.
complete response
The response is incomplete as it does not fully address the prompt. You need to develop your argument further by discussing the role of governments and companies as well as comparing it to the role of individuals. Additionally, a balanced view that considers both sides of the argument can help in achieving a complete response.
clear comprehensive ideas
There is a lack of clarity in expressing your ideas. Aim to use a wide range of vocabulary accurately and organize your sentences to clearly convey your message. Minimize grammatical errors to avoid ambiguity.
relevant specific examples
Your examples are not specific enough and don't effectively illustrate the point you are making. Use more relevant and detailed examples to substantiate your claims and demonstrate a deeper understanding of how individual actions can impact the environment.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental conservation
  • grassroots movements
  • corporate responsibility
  • government regulations
  • sustainable change
  • reduce, reuse, recycle
  • energy efficiency
  • pollution control
  • carbon footprint
  • eco-friendly choices
  • public awareness
  • green initiatives
  • advocacy
  • conservation efforts
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