The graph belows shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Cafe, by seasons.

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The given bar chart illustrates information about daily sales by food aspects in five different categories,

such

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as hot caffeine, iced

coffee

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ice

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cream, soup and salad in winter and summer.

Overall

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, it is noticeable, that hot

coffee

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has by far the highest amount of serving.

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with, as the graph shows the different kinds of foods and drinks proportions are nearly equal since the numbers

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between approximately 22 and 40.

By contrast

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, in winter the average sales are significantly fluctuating

due to

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numbers being between nearly 2 and 75.

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, in winter hot caffeine and soup have the highest ratio in total with the quantity of 75 and 50.

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this

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ice

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cream and salad have almost the same number of servings with 20 total,

while

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iced

coffee

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witnessed a huge declining trend with almost zero quantity.

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, in summer

ice

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coffee

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has levelled up to 40

such

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ice

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cream which increased to 35.

Finally

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, hot

coffee

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, soup and salad have almost the same totals in order to the amounts are 30, 25 and 25.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, ice with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

180 words

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