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Write about the following topic. The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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There has been a prevailing belief that
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 the best way to plan your
holiday
 is without organising it. Witch suggests that being spontaneous
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 contributes to better experiences.
While
 l concur that
this
 kind of break-off can become really enjoyable it can
also
 be proven a total mess up. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will explain why I disagree with
this
 statement. First of all, organising a vacation can be proven extremely challenging,
while
 it presupposes time and a good mood.
For example
, being the one who organised a
holiday
 with friends in Athens,I had to put everything we wanted, into a schedule of five days,
according to
 the days we could visit museums, theatre and concerts
while
 at the same time l had to organise a not exhausting and entertaining plan. Even though the organisation was challenging the result was unbelievable because we made the most of it. Planning your
holiday
 doesn't need to be strict but it can guide you to create more experiences.
On the other hand
, there is excitement about travelling without knowing what you will come across.
For instance
, the time l visited my boyfriend's grandparents in Lgoumenitsa, we didn't have a plan except to visit the closest beaches. Our trip ended with us visiting Corfu, Parga and Lefkada, just because we wanted to fill up our days, creating memorable experiences.
Although
 those kinds of trips can be proven amusing they always contain the risk of failure more than the organised ones. Ultimately, buying those trips can become beautiful memories, but not buying them can provide safety. Many people will agree that planning your
holiday
 is the best way to experience something new,
while
 there is
also
 a need for spontaneous moments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured itinerary
  • stress-free
  • budget management
  • overspending
  • time management
  • accommodations
  • peak seasons
  • spontaneity
  • unique experiences
  • rigid
  • serendipitous encounters
  • flexible itinerary
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