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Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There is ongoing debate on the possibility of economic prosperity and environmental good conditions. Some individuals believe it is not applicable and the opponents don’t think in
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 way. In my perspective,
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, these two issues are interrelated with some plans, it is possible to have economic success and a clean
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. On the one hand, there are some people who believe economic growth leads to entirely demolishing the
environment
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. They display the examples of the developed
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 and their industries that ruined the
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 by pollution, deforestation and carbon emissions which contributed to global warming.
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, they conclude the consequence of economic prosperity is environmental defects.
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, opponents bring out some reasons that emphasize that it is possible that growth in the economic situation is not synonymous with environmental damage.
Countries
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 which consider preventing harmful activities introduce some strategies to maintain the
environment
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 and boost their economic development. Some Nordic
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,
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 as Norway have very restricted regulations about preserving the
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 that industries should obey.
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 means, there are some examples of having both economic success and preserving the
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. In conclusion, for centuries development was alongside environmental disruption
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, these days many
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 strive to preserve the
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 and economic success is not related directly to environmental defects.
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Consider expanding the discussion on how countries can balance both economic growth and environmental preservation by providing specific policies or technologies that facilitate this balance.
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Some sentences could be clearer and more concise. Ensure each point is clearly stated and connects back to your main argument.
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The essay presents a balanced discussion by covering both sides of the argument effectively.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly sets the scene for the essay and provides a clear viewpoint, which is maintained throughout.
coherence cohesion
A solid conclusion is provided that neatly summarizes the main viewpoints discussed.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economically successful
  • Clean environment
  • Sustainable practices
  • Green technologies
  • Eco-tourism
  • Healthier workforce
  • Healthcare costs
  • Short-term economic growth
  • Profit over environment
  • Heavy industries
  • Developing countries
  • Sacrifice
  • Economic development
  • Transitioning
  • Balance
  • Sustainable development
  • International cooperation
  • Incentivize
  • Eco-friendly business practices
  • Investment in education
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