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It is responsibility of the developed countries to provide aid to the developing countries. Do you agree or disagree.

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In
this
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 globalization era, it is debated that the nations which have already developed should give help to the developing economies.
Although
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 it is the responsibility of a country to focus on its own growth, some proper guidance from a developed economy definitely helps the fostering countries boost their activities. So, I completely agree with
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 statement as the aid is important for managing the lack of
resources
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 and drawbacks of technological advancement.
Firstly
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, the world has limited
resources
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 which are spread in different proportions in various countries
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 some parts of the world have no
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. what I mean by
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 is that. A nation is ready to work hard for its improvement of economy but there is a problem with lack of inputs. In these circumstances, it is the obligation of the states which have already grown to share their own assets with those emerging tribes.
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, in Sri Lanka, America provides 10 per cent of its coal for development.
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, another reason for offering support to expanding territories is the lack of technological advancement.
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 is to say that many emerging states struggle to increase their production
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 of technological stagnation. and
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, it is the duty of advanced nations to share their experience with these poor states which are backward in economic growth.
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, in India, the UK has shared its knowledge innovation to improve its mass production.
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, in
this
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 sustainable period, it is the compulsory obligation of every country to be cooperative by sharing its
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 and technical ideas. so I agree it is the must-wanted thing in
this
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 present situation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral obligation
  • Redress
  • Global stability
  • Foster
  • Economic growth
  • Humanitarian
  • Alleviate
  • Poverty
  • Cultural exchange
  • International cooperation
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