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The pie charts compare information and
prediction
about citizens of two countries (Fix the agreement mistake
predictions
Yemen
and Italy) in the years
2000 and 2050.
It is noticeable that the propotion
of 60 Correct your spelling
proportion
promotion
years
people might increase by 2050 in both countries. Also
, humans aged 15-59 years
recorded the largest sigment
except Correct your spelling
segment
of
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for
Yemen
in 2000.
In 2000 50,1 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
Yemen
's citizens were younger than 14 years
, while
the equivalent figure for Italy 14,3
% Add a missing verb
was 14,3
that
was Correct pronoun usage
which
significant
less. By 2050 population aged 0-14 Change the adjective
significantly
years
may decrease by 13 percent
and population in Yemen
, and by 3 percent
in Italy. By contast
, both countries expect Correct your spelling
contrast
growing
in the category of humans over 60 Replace the word
growth
years
, from 3,6% to 5,7% in Yemen
, and from 24,1% to 42,3% in Italy.
In 2000 average age citizens (between 15 and 59) accounted the
highest Change preposition
for the
propotion
Correct your spelling
proportion
of
Italy, and second highest Change preposition
in
propotion
in Vemen.Correct your spelling
proportion
However
, percentage
of humans from 15 Correct article usage
the percentage
years
to 59 years
might rise from 46,3 to 57,3 in Yemen
, while
figure
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the figure
a figure
of
Italy may fall from 64,6 Change preposition
for
percent
to 46,2 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, years, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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