he given pie charts show data on the population ages in Yemen and ... the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy by 201 he given pie charts show data on the population ages in Yemen and ... the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy by 201

he given pie charts show data on the population ages in Yemen and ... the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy by 201 he given pie charts show data on the population ages in Yemen and ... the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy by 201
IELTS Writing Task Chart for he given pie charts show data on the population ages in Yemen and ... the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy by 201 he given pie charts show data on the population ages in Yemen and ... the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy by 201
The pie charts compare information and
prediction
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predictions
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about citizens of two countries (
Yemen
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and Italy) in the
years
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2000 and 2050.        It is noticeable that the
propotion
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proportion
promotion
of 60
years
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people might increase by 2050 in both countries.
Also
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, humans aged 15-59
years
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recorded the largest
sigment
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segment
except
of
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for
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Yemen
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in 2000.          In 2000 50,1
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percent
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per cent
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of
Yemen
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's citizens were younger than 14
years
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,
while
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the equivalent figure for Italy
14,3
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was 14,3
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%
that
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which
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was
significant
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significantly
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less. By 2050 population aged 0-14
years
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may decrease by 13
percent
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and population in
Yemen
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, and by 3
percent
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in Italy. By
contast
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contrast
, both countries expect
growing
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growth
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in the category of humans over 60
years
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, from 3,6% to 5,7% in
Yemen
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, and from 24,1% to 42,3% in Italy.            In 2000 average age citizens (between 15 and 59) accounted 
the
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for the
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highest
propotion
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proportion
of
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in
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Italy, and second highest
propotion
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proportion
in Vemen.
However
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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of humans from 15
years
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to 59
years
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might rise from 46,3 to 57,3 in
Yemen
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,
while
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figure
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the figure
a figure
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of
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for
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Italy may fall from 64,6
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percent
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per cent
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to 46,2
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, years, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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