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The tow maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The tow maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The maps illustrate accessibility through roads to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010. At first glance, two roundabouts were added at the start and the end of Hospital
Rd
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 and facilities
such
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 as
car
Correct article usage
a car

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 park and bus station were moved to a new place. in 2007, there was a car park for both staff and the public
while
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 in 2010, a new car park specialized public was built on the east of the city hospital and the older one remained for staff's cars merely. Bus stops at first were located on the right and left side of the Hospital
Rd
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 but after that, they moved to the distinguish portion on the left side of the Hospital
Rd
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. It can be seen that two roundabouts were constructed during these years
in
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at

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 the junction of City Road and Hospital
Rd
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, and between Ring Road and Hospital
Rd
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. Two roads to access
bus
Correct article usage
the bus

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 station easily were built.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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