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The tow maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The tow maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The maps illustrate accessibility through roads to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010. At first glance, two roundabouts were added at the start and the end of Hospital
Rd
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 and facilities
such
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 as
car
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a car
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 park and bus station were moved to a new place. in 2007, there was a car park for both staff and the public
while
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 in 2010, a new car park specialized public was built on the east of the city hospital and the older one remained for staff's cars merely. Bus stops at first were located on the right and left side of the Hospital
Rd
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 but after that, they moved to the distinguish portion on the left side of the Hospital
Rd
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. It can be seen that two roundabouts were constructed during these years
in
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at
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 the junction of City Road and Hospital
Rd
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, and between Ring Road and Hospital
Rd
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. Two roads to access
bus
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the bus
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 station easily were built.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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