In recent years, more and more people are choosing to live in cities rather than in rural areas. What are the reasons for this trend, and do you think it has more advantages or disadvantages?
Nowadays, big
cities
have their personas that appeal to many people
to live. The contributing factor to this
trend is the uneven development
between central cities
and rural areas
. I believe if this
phenomenon happens in the long run, it will create a huge deal of disadvantages.
First and foremost, the transmigration rate is increasing due to
uneven development
programs between regions. As people
cannot get proper facilities to support their lives such
as health and education institutions, they tend to move and stay in cities
for good. For example
, in 2022, the Sumatrans chose to leave their origin to pursue a better life in Jakarta, the capital city of Indonesia. With hopes that they will get better opportunities to grow in cities
, staying in their village is not a preferable option.
Whilst there are several advantages that will be obtained by people
who live in cities
, however
, if the transmigration waves happen massively, the disadvantages will outweigh the positive sides. The most tangible effect is the economic development
in rural areas
will be even weakened. Since the areas
lose their human capital as actors in most economic activities, then
it becomes a huge deal to maintain the wealth rates. Take the same case as an example, the Sumatrans. As a result
, of massive movement, Sumatra Island is very behind in terms of public facility construction. There is concrete evidence while
the areas
are losing their populations, it will be harder to pursue significant growth.
To sum up
, we cannot deny that many people
are choosing to stay in big cities
. The reason why they are leaving their origins is the development
gap in rural areas
compared with those in central cities
. However
, if this
phenomenon continues to happen, the massive movement will create a wider economic gap, which I believe the negative side will outweigh the advantages that may appear.Submitted by aidafathiaa on
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task response
Your essay partially addresses the prompt but lacks a full exploration of the reasons for the trend of urban migration. You should expand upon the reasons and provide a balanced view of both the advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is structured with an introduction, body, and conclusion, which shows an understanding of essay organization. However, transitions between ideas could be improved for better flow. Use more linking words and phrases to help connect ideas more naturally.