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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.
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The line graph compares three
companies
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 in terms of their
waste
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output
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 between the years 2000 and 2015.
It is clear that
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 there were significant changes in the amounts of
waste
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 produced by all three
companies
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.
While
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companies
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 A and
B
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 saw
waste
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output
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 fall over the 15-year period, the amount of
waste
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 produced by
company
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C
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 increased considerably. In 2000,
Company
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 A produced 12
tonnes
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 of
waste
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,
while
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companies
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B
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 and
C
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 produced around 8
tonnes
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 and 4
tonnes
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 of
waste
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 material respectively. Over the following 5 years, the
waste
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output
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 of
companies
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B
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 and
C
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 rose by around 2
tonnes
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, but the figure for
company
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 A fell by approximately 1 tonne. From 2005 to 2015,
Company
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 A cut
waste
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 production by roughly 3
tonnes
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, and
Company
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B
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 reduced its
waste
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 by around 7
tonnes
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.
By contrast
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,
company
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C
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 saw an increase in
waste
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 production of approximately 4
tonnes
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 over the same 10-year period. By 2015,
Company
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C
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’s
waste
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output
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 had risen to 10
tonnes
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,
while
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 the respective amounts of
waste
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 from
companies
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 A and
B
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 had dropped to 8
tonnes
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 and only 3
tonnes
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words companies, waste, output, b, company, c, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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