The graph below shows the information about medical care in three European countries between 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table depicts medical treatment and equipment in

austria

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Austria

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france

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France

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and

sweden

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Sweden

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from 1980 until 2000. There were 3

aspetcs

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aspects

which being study topic;

doctor

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doctors

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, hospital

beds

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and

average

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the average

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stay in hospitals.

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, Sweden got the highest amount in 3 different aspects during 20 years. Physicians in Austria

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the lowest,

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hospital bed and hospital's average stay in France were the least. Looking in more detail, physicians in Austria experienced a slow increase between 1980 and 2000, from 800 to 1000 people. The availability of

bed

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beds

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hospital

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hospitals

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grew significantly, from 1400 to 3700

beds

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. Meanwhile, people who stayed in

hospital

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the hospital

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decreased rapidly from 18

until

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days

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average

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on average

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, in France, the amount of

doctor

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doctors

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had fallen to 50% at 1300 people.

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, the total of hospital

beds

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underwent a dramatic

rose

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eightfold.

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, patients who stayed in

hospital

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the hospital

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for medical treatment took 9

days

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in 1980 and down to 5

days

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in 2000. The

last

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, Sweden had 3600 doctors in 1980 and faced

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fluctuated to 3800 doctors in 2000. The number of hospital

beds

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remained

no change

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unchanged

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at 6400

beds

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from 1980 to 1990 before

went

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up gradually to 6900

beds

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in 2000. After that, the average

stayed

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of inpatients in hospitals went down at 18

days

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in 1990 and up again at 21

days

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in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words beds, days with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 5 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

221 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

life expectancy
healthcare facilities
hospital beds
medical personnel
healthcare expenditure
Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
trends
fluctuations
comparative analysis
demographic
socioeconomic factors
preventative care
infrastructure investment
affordability
accessibility
public health policy

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The graph below shows the information about medical care in three European countries between 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Topic: In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

As the world becomes technologically advanced,computers are replacing people at more and more jobs. what are some job positions that may be lost because of computers?What are some problems that may result from this situation?

In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

Nowadays, many people have to work longer time, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?