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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decision about matters that affect them Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some parents have the assumption that allowing their
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 to their own everyday needs tends to make them just think about themselves,
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 other parents believe that it is essential to make
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 learn about decision-making ability in life.
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 essay agrees that even a little thing choice can affect making decision process;
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,
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 essay will still cover both sides. On one hand, parenting style nowadays often involves
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 from their need to school until big things like house renovation. It can make the young in the family learn to take responsibility based on their capability, it will grow a good instinct when they need to make a bigger selection in the future and if mistakes happen from their decision, they will learn from early stages of life.
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, by choosing which clothes
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 will wear, they will become decisive in the future like when choosing which major in college, which company they will apply to, and so on.
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, understanding when
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 select their preferences can make them individualistic.
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 belief grows as parents let
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 take part and make everything they want happen, it can make
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 demanding and just thinking about what they want, which will make
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 not put in everyone's shoes by just greedy for their own needs.
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, when
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 insist on buying new basketball shoes
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 the old ones are still good can ignore the fact that maybe their classmate has only one shoe
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 broken. In conclusion, Independence for
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 to make decision making can make different assumptions based on what it can imply in
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's ability in the future.
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, choosing a good parenting style can make
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 learn and grow as respectful persons
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 great decision-making capacity.
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